1. World hunger is a crime.

(too general)

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2. E-mail is used by a great many people.

(too general)

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3. I will point out the many ways energy can be saved in the home.

(makes an announcement)

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4. Because Congress is very important in the United States.

(incomplete thought)

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5. In 2010, over 10,000 people died in alcohol-impaired driving crashes.

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(too specific)​